Galerius

This isn't a poem.

hi, i'd like a poem critiqued please

LOVE

The spectrum Spans in front of me what else can a spectrum do, dance? of course it spans; now try telling us why your enamored with it. With its bright ...

thanks everyone. am i allowed to pm people and ask if they can critique my work? (this is because i want to post some stuff but i dont want it ...

Trapped in a box that I put myself in Fighting for a life that I truly want to end in and end dont rhyme, if that's what you were going ...

is this actually pagan (eg. worship of the Gods, rituals used by the ancients, belief in the Elysian Fields or Valhalla, etc) or the "neo"pagan nonsense that people attach themselves ...

Prologue “His blood pressures dropping, Doctor.” The responsibility for the patient was fully in Kate’s hands. New anxiety welled up in her. She didn’t need this. She’d had more that ...

Frozen lakes and sugar cakes Daffodils and paint spills Computer screens and fairy dreams First loves and silver doves... paint spills doesnt really work here, because it implies randomness and ...

As he huffed far away, From his bill, on the head man's hill, He stretched his limbs, and looked around. his bill? what does that mean? stretched his limbs and ...

Prologue The air hung with the fumes that poured from the factories. A dark world surrounded the people who hurried through the freezing city streets. first sentence is great, second ...

I know where you are. if this is a love poem (which i already suspect it is) then your first line is a real disappointment because it makes it seem ...

Haha, I'm not actually 58...I don't want to give my real age (i'm a teen, by the way) but i don't know how to bypass the age i made up ...

two whole years good, i like how you split it into each line to make emphasis. it sounds like she's saying each word heavily you didn't ring me every night ...