Galerius

Hi Jagged, This is good. This is... very good. You managed to avoid all of the pitfalls of using gimmicks - the lack of consistent punctuation and capitalization, for example, ...

Hi blackbird12, One of the primary - and glaring - missteps in this poem is that it follows such a predictable formula throughout. "A goes to B". "The chimes are ...

Hi wewinwelose, Yeah, no. I don't know if you are deliberately channeling Disney or if you just don't know what a cliche is, but phrases like this: I want to ...

i liked it from the beginning very very goood!!! review mine please? thank you xx

Haha. I don't know which dictionary to which you're referring, but mine describes it as "Absence of, or rejection of, belief in existence of a god or gods." Crucially, the ...

Hi PaperCrane, Shut up. Writing that joke of a poem is one thing, but trying to defend such nonsense is quite another. Let me clue you in: You don't know ...

Hi Persephoneia, This is the epitome of mediocre. The weird pseudo-apathetic plodding only runs the message of this poem into the dirt like a rut on a rainy day, and ...

Hi StreetRat, I realize this is pretty short, but it pretty much summed up how I it's cool. No, it's really not. I'm getting a bunch of haphazard descriptions with ...

Hi DannielleLovesong, Have you listened to Taylor Swift or Demi Lovato recently? I'm asking because this sounds exactly like the sugar-fattened nonsense with which their songs are stuffed, only... the

Hi Lauren2010, You seem to alternate between decent imagery and useless description - pseudoimagery, as I call it. It turns this poem into an earthquake that raises the land to ...

Hi Firearris, This is... bad. If your goal was to create an utterly useless scrambled-egg concoction of words and link them up through pseudo-emotions like "Disgusted I am" and "anger ...

Hi Kyllorac, This is basically a loaf of bread. What you've done is take some consumable elements, put them together, heated them up via some imagery, and then shoved the ...

Just you. Not really. Haven't noticed. No thoughts on the matter. Not particularly. No highlights. - Galerius

Hi m0734427, The indulgence of improper conversation creates insecurities. I am hard-pressed to find, in the whole of the poetry section here on YWS, a line more devoid of life ...