Galerius

Okay, well first of all i do like it. And second it should not be past, it should be passed. And third break it apart like after every period enter ...

I'm a glass child, still a child. I could be broken by the slightest heartache. oh come on, there has to be a better way of telling us this without...well, ...

Cradling our hearts in each other’s minds, we listen to the waves as they whistle, swell, then draw away. good contrast in the first line, hearts and minds go together ...

Figures crowed my tear swollen eyes. Everyone in my life whom I've loved; all the enemies that I still despise. What did they crow? the harsh laments of a lover ...

The best of friends can hurt the most. The wound, it mends, but never goes. i like this beginning, very assertive. almost as if you're telling the audience "hey! I'm ...

none of the above, they are all extremely cliched. although a goddess fallen from power might be interesting...

We can be anywhere just you and me. We can go anywhere just wait and see. This is the way it's got to be, I'll wait for you...if you wait ...

We can be anywhere just you and me. We can go anywhere just wait and see. This is the way it's got to be, I'll wait for you...if you wait ...

Faux replaces where reality once dwelled as I pray, that one day, my time will come. I already like this, although you're right its short. The faux in the beginning ...

I would have thought this was quite clear. The second line is written in the first person, therefore it is evident that 'his' is referring to the preacher. It could ...

Ethan Ellenberg agency wanted to sign a contract with PublishAmerica? That doesn't make sense...the agency has a good reputation and I don't see how they, of all people, would be ...

Cushioned by his holy books spoils galore I can still remember the preacher. you were cushioned or was the preacher cushioned within his own deceitful books? you are being unclear. ...

:!: So many pity lives Being shot and stabbed by knifes Shouts and screams in the battle lines But I mostly hear the explosions of mines Sad to hear that ...

Worst opening line ever: "Hi, my name's Bob, and this is a story about me!"