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Re: The Comedian
At last comes the comedian Lover’s pal and cynic’s friend If you're going to use words like "At last", you'd better back them up elsewhere in the piece. After giving ...
Feb 19, 2009 -
Re: 1500 Points Up for Grabs
Giving away the last of my 89 points since I won't be needing them anymore. Who wants them?[i][u] Sorry, can only offer 89 points.
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: Like a Child
This poem gave the reader absolutely nothing that he didn't already know. Basically, it could have been summed up in a line or two, because inside the skeleton of the ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: It Hurts
This poem hurts. It's typical teenage nonsense with the customary cutting and absolutely no poetic quality, which is why I am mystified as to why you see this as a ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: I hate the way...
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Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: War (Ask Me No Questions)
Ask me no questions I’ll tell you no lies Share me no secrets You’ll get no surprise The first two lines are copied verbatim by the writer Oliver Goldsmith and ...
Jan 10, 2009 -
Re: what do you do when you feel like giving up?
All you do is complain about how you're a terrible writer. In fact, you've been doing this for over a year: If you're just looking for attention and sympathy...YWS' goal ...
Jan 9, 2009 -
Re: "Emo" Poetry vs. Good Poetry
...But can't poetry be dark and sad? Isn't that what an emo is? When I refer to my poetry being "emo" I'm talking about the general tone or feeling to ...
Jan 8, 2009 -
Re: Books
You’re always there for me, Ready to take me back, No matter how long I neglect you, You sit there in a stack. You are emphasizing...what, exactly? The loyalty of ...
Jan 8, 2009 -
Re: His Eyes
His eyes are pulling me into his arms Pulling one into the arms of another has been an action expressed with far too much in poetry and stories. The same ...
Jan 8, 2009 -
Re: my poem
Before we begin, you should know that writing in fully-capitalized phrases is anathema to any theme you could possibly have and aesthetically reminds the reader of a mindless shouting match. ...
Jan 8, 2009 -
Re: Police foil German children's dash to Africa
I knew that meme would come in handy one day.
Jan 7, 2009 -
Re: 1500 Points Up for Grabs
500 f#$@ing points up for f%#$@ing grabs. Who f@#%^ing wants 'em? F*@% it.
Jan 7, 2009 -
Re: Don't judge me by my looks!
My cousin questions, “Why are you always grumpy?” My friend wonders, “Would it hurt you to smile?” Instead of always asking me the same question You should search for the ...
Jan 6, 2009 -
Re: Ghosts of Time
Do not listen to the above poster's advice on stanzas. The format of this poem is good the way it is and is probably actually superior to one with stanzas ...
Jan 6, 2009
