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Re: The Man of Many Words
Hi bailecielo, My heart is slowly lit, by words expressed with wit. But I'll remain on guard, for love is yet too hard. Already I can tell that this is ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: Black
Quietloud, This poem tries too hard and ends up falling flat on its face as a result. Black shadows dance under pitch-black skies Black words spoken through angry black lies ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: I'm Hungry...
Sh'yea! Thanks.
May 19, 2009 -
Re: Academy for Heroes-In-Training
Rummaged around my pocket, felt my fingers grasp the pocketknife and cigarettes. Not today, Self. Today's a day to look your best. Finally, my skin touched the plastic canister. Found ...
May 18, 2009 -
Re: Runaway
She knew why leaving was the only option she had left. Why such awkward line breaks? It's ugly and constantly reminds the reader that he's reading a poem and not ...
May 17, 2009 -
Re: Lin's Reviews
"Southern Fire", lyric poetry. Thanks.
May 16, 2009 -
Re: In the Wake Before the Dawn
There was fire in the heavens. The aurora blazed overhead, bathing the frozen Baja peninsula in vibrant colour. It was somewhat beautiful. But for Rob Reynolds and Dana Sentrosi, it ...
May 15, 2009 -
Re: PAMLOST - A complete short story.
Please do check the date next time.
May 15, 2009 -
Re: DT: Academy for Heroes-In-Training
Name: Self Explanatory Gender: Still unknown after several guesses Age: 19.9 years Ancestor: Edward Cullen from Twilight Alliance: Mercenary, fights for whomever s/he feels will be most profitable at
May 15, 2009 -
Re: Dream
Anyway, I came up with some random lines off the top of my head. Then I'm going to advise throwing this away right now. Submitting "random" thoughts and bragging that ...
May 14, 2009 -
Re: Where is My Savior Now?
Twisted and perverted vines ensnare victims of wrongdoing. Wrongdoing? Such an abstract concept sandwiched uncomfortably between a tangible image and a vague ending to the stanza. Don't torment the re
May 13, 2009 -
Re: Myself
Burning muscles scream in rage, bloody fingernails tear in pain. I'm slowly ripping my past away, every vain by fucking vain. The verbs and adjectives you use could have worked ...
May 13, 2009 -
Re: deleated
Working title. Let me know if you have any better ideas. Yes, that's a very bad title considering that by saying "Pure Darkness", you emphasize only one point of your ...
May 12, 2009 -
Re: Love Is
Love is letting you pick your favorite film Titanic because he wants to see the smile on your face. The cliche here is almost physically painful. "Girls like Titanic, boys ...
May 11, 2009 -
Re: disease
Oh this disease, This terrible disease! I’m so difficult to please, Yet so easily diseased! The second line has nothing to do with the three around it, from the reader's ...
May 11, 2009
