Galerius

Hi Kylan, yellow djinnis of smog rising from the spot, isolating the sun like a variable This is a mathematics reference? Isolating variables to solve a problem? Why? – red, ...

One is that this is a community site, and I think the chatroom detracts from that somewhat. It ends up reinforcing cliques (I know many will deny this, but it's ...

Yeahyeah, come and get it. 500 points up for grabs.

Hi Tusker93, This is bad. There are ways to confront metaphysical and philosophical issues in poetry, and this is by no means an acceptable one. Barring the first few lines, ...

Hi FLyerS, BOOM-boom BOOM-boom Your heartbeat BOOM-boom BOOM-boom Is constant BOOM-boom BOOM-ba-boom my heartbeat BA-boom-boom ba-BOOM-BOOM will falter BOOM-boom BOOM-boom Your heartbeat BOOM-boom BOO

Hi dogs, You are the sun and the moon, The mdnight shine and the golden glow. You are the flickering light adn teh shattered bulb, The flashing lights and the ...

Hi J.R.S., You told me not that you were leaving, You told me not of what I wanted to hear, You simply left me grieving, Growing sadder with each tear. ...

Hi mimimac, He sat alone at home, Each minute a painful wait, The clock hand moving slowly, Each tick lessening faith. The pseudo-imagery that somewhat makes an appearance and then ...

Hi writ3r, Fear. Like a Snake That creeps across The grass. Idea here is vapid, inconsistent. Who is fearing? I would assume that it is the observer, but that is ...

Hi JK, I know this sounds really, really emo at the beginning, but bear with me. It gets better. Look, having a disclaimer at the start of any poem is ...

Hi Master, Time gives us a present, Even a past and a future. Why the "even"? It's as if you expect the reader to be surprised; that doesn't make sense, ...

Hi Flower~Child, I am not even going to bother to give this a line-by-line critique. Not only do you make mistakes in every one, they are the same mistakes repeated ...

Hi Hypknowsis, A mother’s grief; how she lost her child A child’s playground; swimming all day A training ground for athletes; swimming every day A pool of ideas; excellent for ...

Hi Rosey Unicorn, Somebody’s gotta die, Take your pick. Could be you, could be your lover, Could be your father, mother or brother. Why somebody has to die has never ...