Gahks

Yes, I do like this poem. Some notes: Perhaps "she thanks the gods..." rather than "Thanking the gods..." as this doesn't make sense. "Oh-so-dear" sounds somewhat contrived; try simply "...she ...

Tortured Souls The taxi pulled up outside the terraced Ealing house early one morning. Its occupant squeezed out and smiled amid the sneering winter chill. He’d found the right address. ...

This piece lacked action, but this turned out to be an advantage for something that tackles such a tricky issue. You didn't make it too emotionally charged. You could improve ...

The first part of a play in progress: one act, one scene, in real time. CHARACTERS MASON, a detective in his late thirties BRADSHAW, a detective in his early twenties ...

Hey there from England! Welcome to YWS! :D Hope you enjoy our company. Gahks

Apart from the occasional spelling/punctuation errors, this story has potential. You could do with substituting 'red' for synonyms such as 'crimson' or 'burgundy,' while still keeping the repetition,

Hey there from England! Welcome! :D Hope you find it fun here. Post some stuff soon!

*laughs at definition* That's made my day. Welcome to YWS from England, Kakistocracy! Although I can't say we're much of a kakistocracy on this site :D Hope you enjoy our ...

This is a great poem. You managed to find a decent rhyme scheme, which always livens up my day. Punctuation was inconsistent in places, but this is a small aside ...

The only thing I really liked about this poem was the comparison to life. Otherwise it seemed a little ordinary. Find something much more powerful to express in just so ...

If I absolutely must, then I will write longhand. Otherwise the standard word processor. Nothing wildly inventive.

This story didn't really grip me. I was expecting more action - I like openings to hit the ground running. But I do see the mysterious quality in your buildup. ...

The hero dies a horrible death and miraculously comes back to life when after endless resuscitation, all hope is lost.

VOMIT WRITE! Vomit writing is writing anything that comes into your head. No matter how crap it is. Apart from its usefulness as a stress buster, you might find that ...

The best bit about this piece is the ending. It's chilling and leaves a sour taste in your mouth. The main problem for me is that there's too much description ...