Gahks

Don't forget the Hollywood Approach: Which idea has the most 'legs'? And top tip: if you're overflowing with ideas (as I am often), just GET THEM DOWN! You can always ...

Presumably this is set in Scotland judging by the dialect. This looks like the opening of a story and it's a great one for a first-timer. Although I love the ...

The second part of my psychological crime drama. THOMPSON: (Addressing the audience) You know, you’ve had it easy. All your lives you’ve had it easy. Going to a proper school. ...

It could just be a combination of factors, i.e. the meteor, disease etc. that led to the dinosaurs' demise. We shouldn't just be looking at any one culprit. Gahks

It's just awful and very, very tragic. It baffles me how many suicides there have been in such a short time. My thoughts are currently with all the victims' families. ...

Hey there from England! Welcome to YWS! Hope you have fun here. See you around! Gahks (pronounced 'garks')

Hey Jabber! Haven't you been around a while? You actually LIKE harsh critters? Am amazed... :) See you around! Gahks

TRIALS not trails? Sorry, small spelling note.

I presume you can speak French well... Am I correct?

Also, TELLING occurs if you are using too many passive verbs. SHOWING is describing things ACTIVELY.

Not many. Most of my work stays intact apart from a few tweaks, but not omitting whole chunks. It helps to take a break after you write so you can ...

This is only the first part... more to follow! Thanks for reviewing and watch this space!

Yes, this article was much needed and is much appreciated! :D

Thanks. Comments much appreciated. Will work on it.

Grammar and punctuation, as Snoink rightly points out, needs work. Is it deliberate or not? Your beginning was by far the best part. Then suddenly this Duey person appeared and ...