Gahks

You may want to leave a space between the introduction and the beginning to let us know it isn't actually part of the poem. Your word choice, like other people ...

Yes I agree with some of the above comments. You have some really nice ideas but try to use more imagery. Instead of telling us a lot of your feelings ...

I was briefly reading an article about this in the "Times Higher Education" magazine; it had some very thought-provoking ideas. At one point it mentioned how in the '20s many ...

I have gone too far Just to claim what is mine. Like the enigmatic beginning. The stars in the sky will never say a word No witnesses in the dark. ...

The Tunnel Whose depths forever coil the secret we both shared: as we howled into the vice of glinting darkness, tasting passion, folding flesh, blinding each other with the agony ...

Write for an hour a day. Or even five minutes. Whatever you do, keep those creative juices flowing. Set yourself a dedicated time to write. Just vomit write. Doesn't matter ...

Hey SK! Welcome to YWS from cloudy England! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); glad to meet you! I don't read or write science-fiction, but there are plenty of people on ...

How can we eat the bloody pizza when the pizza man is eating it right now?

Wow! Great for a first shot! I did like the use of anaphora and repetition here but I felt you overused it. Keep to the rule of three! However, the ...

Hey there. Welcome! So sorry to read about what happened. Although I sympathise with your loss, I agree with the other reviewers: get rid of the emotion. It's too cliched ...

DI James Mason sighed at the prospect of being stuck with his nephew for the next God-knows-how-many hours. Even simply staring at a suspect through the two-way mirror, eyes glinting ...

Agreed, Firestarter. In my opinion, your religion can be as flexible as that bendy plastic toy you got from McDonalds. Just because you're 'born' into a faith doesn't mean you ...

Yes: please get back to the topic now!

Why can't I?

Eat them all. Mmm, delicious! What would you do if the world ran out of oil?