Gahks

Yes, I agree with Josh here. Repetition can work but only up to a point. In my piece, "Lake", people found it effective because I changed it slightly at the ...

Hi there; welcome! This was a good first attempt at writing love poetry; I applaud you in that respect. You tried to put in some interesting imagery - "My gravestone ...

Not a movie, but I like these: Briscoe: You heard of the Seven Rings of Saturn? These are the Two Rings of Riker's. Briscoe: (referring to a hockey stick used ...

Great. Now can we get back on topic? If you have any other bones of contention, please PM. Thanks.

Yes, agree with Firearris: a fractured narrative like this would be far more suspenseful and generate greater interest.

Hey there Daniel! Welcome to YWS from cloudy England! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); pleased to meet you! I don't write sci-fi myself, but I'm in the middle of a ...

Hey there from cloudy England! Welcome to YWS! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); good to meet you? What sort of things do you like to read or write? Do you ...

I like both, but I think Jodie is more likely to have the stamina to cope with eight shows a week (she is 28 but Jessie is 18), so that's ...

Is it? Discuss. Personally, I quite like still having a monarchy, despite the fact that she acts mainly as a figurehead and doesn't wield any real power - that belongs ...

Agreed! *laughs uncontrollably at the insanity of it all*

Literary fiction = placing compelling character development above a compelling plot. Commercial fiction = the opposite. See Wikipedia:

Yeah, I have to agree with the others here. The problem with the rhyme scheme, as those above have pointed out, is that it's too forced. As a consequence, it ...

Is it likely that we'll withdraw from the '09 competition? (Britain, I mean.) One of the producers: Globalvision Song Contest! The UK and USA can start their own voting bloc! ...

Agreed, Krupp. You had some great ideas, Frangipani, but you didn't reveal their true power and meaning. This poem was too short. Had you fleshed it out and spent a ...

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