Gahks

IT'S OFFICIAL!! Sir Alan found his apprentice (see below): LEE!!!

Yay! An epistolary novel! I love the concept, but the main problem is that you tell far too much rather than SHOW. You use several 'was/were' expressions, e.g.: "I decided ...

No, I like the spreading out, dear! I love the simplicity and quirkiness of it: so refreshing. It almost feels like a fairytale. (I should try and do something like ...

Agree Adna. I applaud Eimear for trying to show us something unusual and perhaps deliberately more mundane, but the odd image here and there could help us readers focus our ...

Park As the sun melts away the last drop of slumber, a once arid air trembles with a torrent of tongues. Flowers surrender their leaves to the generous rays. The ...

Can we end this tangent now and get back on topic ? (I have already contributed my opinions; see above.)

Hey Eimear, Small favour in return for reviewing several of my other poems! ;D First point: I don't agree with Suzanne and some of the others (much as they are ...

I'm with Eimear and Snoink on this one: you can give us as much emotion and feeling as you like, but in a DRAMATIC poem, you need to connect events ...

What did Big Brother say? Please use correct spelling, punctuation and grammar: this is a writers' site.

Your reading of this book shall serve as a dire warning to all those dire people who dare to follow in your dire footsteps.

Summer Heat The sun casts his eye with contempt over the land. I feel him surveying me, stalking me, smothering me in his arrogance. His battle cry translates crushed ice ...

Well done! Good topic choice! Whatever theme you choose in future, never, ever, EVER do a speech about public speaking. It's condescending and morally dumb in my opinion.

Hi AJ from warm, toasty England! Welcome to YWS! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); great to have you on board! I don't do much in the way of fantasy and ...

Seven people have died and ten others have been injured after an unbalanced man went on a stabbing spree in a crowded Tokyo shopping district. The perpetrator, twenty-five year-old factory ...

Do an activity/exercise each session at the start. It's a good way to warm up those creative fires! Also: ADVERTISING. Word-of-mouth, school newsletter, loudhailer announcement, I don't care. Just rec