Gahks

Hey sportgurl! Firstly, I'd like to applaud you for trying to tackle a deep and emotional subject. "Bruises" is a much better title than "Drunk Alcoholic" - the latter simply ...

Hey there Penguin! This is great stuff. The edit from "sifting" to "thumbing" makes a lot of sense; it reads better. I agree that this deserves to be short and ...

Hello there, stranger! Welcome to YWS! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); glad to meet you! I bet it's just as hot out here in sunny England as in Thailand! So ...

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First of all, please post at least two reviews per poem or story. It's just fair on everyone else, and that's how we like it here! You had some interesting ...

Hey Eimear! Great poem; I'm sure everyone can relate to the feelings of disappointment and regret in this piece. You have some really wonderful imagery: "Disappointment, that sickening swoop of ...

Lament of a War Widow Late yesterday, the guns sent you to sleep my love. The birds are not singing today. The house lies still in safe slumber. I sip ...

Hey Novelism! I also adore the username! Welcome to YWS! I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks') - glad to meet you! *offers handshake* So you like novels, then? I suggest you ...

Agreed. As far as I know, I don't think there is such a thing as "unbaptising" or "unconfirmation". These sacraments are meant to declare a commitment to the Christian faith ...

Exodus Amended according to elephant's suggestions. We have not deserted our bloodied, beloved city. The gods have deserted us , on the day that Earth tore herself apart, engulfing us ...

Hey there! First thing: don't preface your poem unless it is absolutely necessary. It spoonfeeds the audience yoru intentions; never a good thing. Let the language reveal itself. I agree ...

The ending is much better now. Well done! (Have you edited this? Because I missed it the first time...) You still have some 'telling' sentences and some stanzas are still ...

Under redrafting.

Hey there! I was passing by and saw you didn't have any reviews so I'll be the first to post! You have some really great imagery: "play tag with your ...

These are great! Good job!