Gabe

If I didn't know I would of thought it was Brian Jaques himself. You have same writing style. and I mean that in a good way. (But please, don't TRY ...

THE WOLF HUNT There she is . . . grazing solemnly. Adrenaline flows through my veins, my heart races. I’m scared to death, but still exited. My legs are spring ...

nice poem. I love the last couple lines. The one part you said " turn into a big loon" I think that's a little random. You should start to think ...

This poems flows very nicely, i like how you brake up your sentences in each line. I'm not reallh sure i get what its about, but i have some ideas, ...

"In a matter of seconds, I was behind the man. He no longer had his sword. I momentarily considered finding it, but discarded the idea and swung my fist at ...

You should give each of the characters names so that you can identify them easier. I have some tips to make the duel more entertaining. From reading it seemed like ...

my stomach starts growling, in the late afternoon my mother simply says,"supper will be ready soon" but my haunger just can't wait so I go to the place where we ...

just so you know i did have to hand this in. I read it aloud. So i ignored gramatical errors and didn't read it word for word

just so you know i did have to hand this in. I read it aloud. So i ignored gramatical errors and didn't read it word for word

wow, that was awesome. Very poetic. my favorite line is: "Flowers close their delicate petals Capturing all the beauty inside" I know it doesn't ryhme, but to be honest I ...

I know everybody has already told you this but I'm gonna tell you it again just to get on your nerves.falling into a white blanket of snow doesn't fit the ...

it is true, vernon, that the emperor did want to surrender, but only after we had bombed them. and plus, they only wanted to surrender to the US. They would ...

how did that guy in the first scene appear. Why was he just randomly sitting in a classroom. You should try to explain a bit what you were thinking on ...

you must have great camera the third picture is a bit awkward

yellow, long, delicous and ripe I write this while smoking my pipe bananas bananas yes its true scrumpcious, delicious and nutrisious too okay, in my defence its hard to find ...