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Feel free to disregard anything I say. You're the author in the end. I don't really have any nitpicks, and they pretty much got them covered anyway. So I'll just ...

Feel free to disregard anything I say...you are the author. :) She didn’t collect from school. Do you mean "collect me"? Okay. Well I guess that ^^ is the only ...

Hey, daytripper! Yay, you put a short piece in Other Fiction (my dwelling :)). I shall attempt to review, even though I don't have too many suggestions. Disregard anything I ...

Feel free to disregard anything I say! You are the author! I scampered around the square, my wide eyes taking in all of the sights in Disneyland. Because you used ...

Feel free to disregard anything I comment on. You're the author in the end! Outside it is glaringly bright but even with the cloudless sky it is surprisingly cold. Watch ...

Feel free to disregard anything I say--you are the author in the end! :) “Hang on,” I heard myself say. “Just hang on. It’s only a scratch.” Okay, this one ...

I doubt you'll end up needing this prologue. It doesn't tell much; I'm sure you can just begin your story and add this scene into the actual story. Tattered, brown ...

This is heartbreaking. Your writing was wonderful. Your best paragraph was the one starting with 'It's a lovely day out there.' In there was beautiful description and good explanation of ...

It was the second to last day of school, I was excited. This beginning isn't very grabbing. My dad and I move a lot since mom died 2 years ago. ...

I loved how you wrote this in a very casual was brilliant. But I felt that it was more and more southern as you read on. Try to keep the ...

Don't make it too clear though. Make it just enough that we can figure it out with one read. Because it's amazing right now, just slightly hazy.

Wow. Your writing style is fantastic . Some of the best I've seen on here. I couldn't find anything stylistically or specific phrases that I didn't like, so here are ...

I'm not really sure of when it's okay to write numbers instead of words, but when you're in doubt, always pick words. I thought the rule was if the number ...

Thank you all. Gryphon, these were the things I wanted people to critique me on. That's why I said it was rough, because some of those (but not all) same ...

This just makes me sick...what a dreadful ending...