Funkymomo

Excuse me, did you just kill my character?

Luna-Poseidon I was nervous going into the fight, but I wasn't scared now. I didn't want to really hurt anyone, but If it came down too it I guess I ...

OMG I love it! Great feeling to it also. try to use more big words!

Nice-second person, I like it. It's hard to write a story in second person. Although, I didn't feel like there was a point. Maybe talk a bit more about the ...

oh, great. I already wrote about Lila

I like it, It has a certain sarcasticness to it that most poems don't have. Let me guess, It took you ten minutes to write that? Try making it clearer ...

I like it, It feels very personal. Hopefully it isn't from your experience though ;)

Luna-Poseidon wednesday After hearing about the Capture the flag game at breakfast, I really wanted to join. I talked to Charlie and She seemed alright with either group, Ares of ...

How do I get through this I no longer know where my heart is The poem's great exept for this. I don't feel like THIS and IS rhyme. Maybe you ...

That's better. Now it's perfect! You could win an award for this! I like the feeling of it too.

I finally found a picture for my character! umm, you have to go to it though LUNA

It's very good, deep and personal too. I didn't see anything wrong with grammar, but hat's just me. My friend writes that way and he's one of the best writers ...

You run right past me ad don’t even stop to wave good-bye And, elmo, not ad

I liked it. The only part I had a problem with was "I can't leave this room." I don't know why but I feel it kind of pulled away from ...

Luna-Poseidon After my unsettling encounter with my new "sister" I had to explore the camp. That Charlie girl had made me think about my family, which is a touchy subject. ...