Funkymomo

I liked it- mostly. I feel you ruined it in the last line. You change the poem from questioning life and thinking about the world to love. I doesn't seem ...

Welcome to the site. Don't post anything TO personal, you know, like a secret you've had since you were five. I'd like to read your stuff though!

T- tumbleweed

Luna-Poseidon I waited behind a tree outside the Hermes cabin. I knew Spirit would see the note soon. I saw her walking towards the cabin. She spotted me and smiled. ...

can we get back to the story?

Very good. I was interested reading it, even though it followed the common 'magic portal' storyline at the start you managed to change it up. I suggest making your main ...

Hi. I had a hard time understanding your story. It's to short to have more than two characters, in my opinion. I had to read it very carefully to understand ...

I liked it, but I think you had short sentences some times. read it through and add a few commas. You remembered to put in old time language which was ...

Luna-Poseidon I was lonely now that Charlie had left camp ( I hope that's OK). I had begun to hang out with the Hermes cabin. They new how to have ...

:( Bye bye Cal gal. Will miss you.

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I don't think it needed a moral, it was for the scary stories contest. Good job, didn't see any problems

Luna-Poseidon The game was fun, but too bad we lost. I was lying down on my bunk when someone came in. It was Spirit, from Hermes. " Hey. Good job ...

It's interesting- YOu had a lot of simple spelling and grammar mistakes though-you might want to reread it and fix those.

Oh, I thought he stabbed me.