Funkymomo

Can I still join? if so, i'll post my profile after school

Wow, that was great! I loved how you write about liking the quietness of sunset and storms, when everyone else likes the busy beaches in the middle of the day. ...

Harry potter- I walked into the bar. I was hoping on banging open the door, having a flash of lightning in the background, and looking awesome, but I tripped. Everyone ...

( i want a reeses :() Luna-Poseidon " Lets go to the camp store, I'll buy you a reeses" I said. Alex smiled. As we walked to the camp store, ...

Hi That was great, really emotional. I think the first paragraph was the worst, It had to much bland description of being hurt and I feel like that's already been ...

G- Godmother

can I send it in?

It sounds beautiful

Luna-Poseidon Well, I just found out that I wasn't the only Poseidon kid. An older camper had just arrived this summer, Katherine. As I was sitting on a rock by ...

Luna- poseidon Well, that was an exciting campfire. I don't really know how I feel, I guess excited that they get to go. I've only been here this summer, so ...

I think the colored text pulls away from the story and I agree with idraax, the colors can be hard to read. I noticed a lot of details in it ...

well not much is going on here. . . Or in the story.

nice poem. I especially liked the last part, about dancing in a meadow. Wouldn't that be fun?

The poet, walking slowly under the thin not a very discriptive word. Try light mist of drizzling rain, climbed the rocky road that led up the cliff. He was mentally ...

Wow. That was really good! You put good emotion into It at the beginning and didn't let the character cry about her mom the whole time. You added depth of ...