Fuffy

Hey Twinflower, I really like this! You are a great writer, and this section really sparks interest to readers, such as myself! Keep on writing!

This is the start of a story I’ve been working on. Just one thing, I’m afraid it may be too short, but I can’t find anywhere to add more detail, ...

Hey Imelda! Welcome to YWS, even though you already have more experience than I do! (I hardly ever post … I just like to read the stories) Anyway, I would ...

Wow! I loved this! I’m excited to see what happens next! One thing I would suggest is that, in the future you might want to describe Leo a little more, ...

I like it! It is mysterious, and leaves the reader wanting more. I also agree with DarkLight, You need to work on the spaceing so it is easier to read. ...