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Hello! I loved the passion you put into this story, and this story sounds exactly like something that could've happened durring the war. I think it is very well writen ...

Hey there! This was a great read for me, and was very well writen. This story I think kind of speaks the truth if a nuclear war would ever break ...

Hey there, I love were you are taking this story. You have great details, naration, and dialouge. Can't wait to read part two of this story, keep writing.

This will help me with my writing very much, thanks for the posting!!!!

Hey there, I loved this story (couse it is a horror stroy so like Audrey I love it). You do have a few errors that you can work on in ...

You have really good idea here, but the the flow of the story is what I call "jagged." The last few paragraphs mainly, I think you need to add some ...

You have a good concept for this story right now, you do have some things you can improvement, but it would seem like Lava, yllufituaebroken and denj pointed out your ...

This was a great read, you took your time and wrote this out thinking of almost every word, this is again was a great read. Keep writing.

I am not really all knowing in the writing of poetry, but this poem to me seems to speak the truth to life. Keep writing.

Ok I think I got what you guys are saying, please re-read it for me and tell me if I'm heading in the right direction.

Ok I've revised it somewhat, please tell me if I was going in the right direction.

Thanks for the review, and the helpful tips. I will try my best to try and improve my writing skills.

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