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Re: Your hug
I don't know if my review will even compare to Anime's review, but I can offer more helpful hints and more points for the Bamboozlers(: One thing that I would ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Teenage Emergency
This was overall well written. You need a quick lesson on punctuation, though. It's important that you have punctuation! I suggest: You mess with their head comma, Make them think ...
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Re: Stalking My Stalker
First of all, it's pretty awkward that you have a stalker. Wait do you really? Great poem either way. Everything looked great, punctuation, grammar, etc. I could really step inside ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: You were wrong
I really like this poem, short sweet and to the point! The spelling, grammar, and punctuation is good. Scratch that, really good. I could really feel what was running through ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Fighting For The Words
Hey, I'm Fortissimo! I don't think I've formally introduced myself anymore. Anyways, without further ado, my review! (ha that rhymed!) Ok, so first, what I really liked is the "organization" ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Shout it to the World.
You are a really talented writer! Other that a few spelling mistakes, this is really good. You have no periods in the entire poem which isn't good. It's best when ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Breath.
This is really good, for starters. I just want to say that it has no punctuation and that is an issue. You don't want to have one big paragraph. Break ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Catch a Falling Star
This is really good, I can't believe this is your first (or one of your first) poems that you've written. It seems that it has already been "torn to shreds." ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Beneath the Smile
Wow! Surprisingly, overall I don't see anything wrong. Normally with poems of this length there is some issues, but other that minor details that have already been picked up by ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: A Heart that Hides
Hi, I'm Forti(: I have to say that this is the first poem (in a long time), that I've seen that has good spelling, punctuation and grammar. I can't see ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Too late
First off... Go Team Bamboozle. Second, great poem! A few helpful hints, though... First, is punctuation! I'm walking through these empty halls comma, filled with memories of you comma, surrounded ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Black Hole
Hi Kim! I liked your poem, but there were a lot of issues as well. But don't worry, we all make mistakes. Your fellow YWSers are here to help you ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Pain
SInce you've been so kind as to guide me on my journey of reviewing, I figured I would try my hand at reviewing one of the master's (you) poems. animekaratepup ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Only You
Hey Mell, I'm Forti(: This poem is very good. It flows real well and the feel is nice. But, like you said it needs a little help. First: mellophone7 said: ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: I Want To Need You
Hi Ultra! I'm Forti(: I'm sort of a Lyric Poetry freak, so I was wondering if you are new here or not. I think I've seen (not literally) you before. ...
May 4, 2011
