Formslipper

I read it, and I thought it was sentimental in a bland sort of way. But, the blandness was very good- it accentuated your theme. Keep it up!

What do you hear With ears deafened- you’re dead Everything you say Doesn’t stay My voice trips Yet still it wavers on While your shrill artificialities drip- Vibrations, because that’s ...

I read it. Very convincing poetry! What I mean by ^that^ is that your rhyming wasn't forced. I struggle a bit with forced rhyming, and always have known it; I ...

I wanted to make something that reeked of symbolism. Here you go: All is calm- you awake, The schooner floats, The air’s of flake “Come,” says First Mate worn, “There’s ...

I read it, and thought you had a cool message. As poems go, there's generally not much to say, except Keep Writing!

I read it, and think you have a cool way of expressing emotion. No criticism except punctuation and capitalization.

I read it, and really liked it! Each stanza sets up the next.

I read it, and WOW. This seriously felt professional, and actually a lot better than most books I've read. I have no criticism, except what's with the Christian theme near ...

I wrote this because I was feeling like friends don't really "cut it" in life. Don't get me wrong- I have a few really close friends! But, you know what- ...

This is a humorous poem. Emotions obliterate, Love makes raw your necessary hate, Fear’s created in your brain, If anything, it is your bane Pain deludes the mind, Takes your ...

Perhaps there's some kind of humor that I'm missing, or an inside joke that started before I joined YWS, but is this "piece" meant to be a mockery of poetry? ...

Part 1 is in my portfolio. “Why fast,” says the riper mind, “If- for all you’re worth- you starve? Can no better meaning you find?” But then you ascertain, Under ...

I read it, or rather "these." I must say, you have an ethereal style about you. Everything is mystic, intrigued, imbued with literary poise. Sadly, though, we live in a ...

Transpose yourself into a place of emptiness- a place where you don’t exist- a place where your mind and body are just inflections of an area removed, reminisced: You’re in ...

I read it. It only serves as an attention grabber- good message, though.