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yup! i like how you describe everything around the story... you're a good writer, how bout that? :lol: ... though the story is a bit cliche(break ups), you made a ...

:shock: wuw! that was intense! i like how the flow of the story goes, and how dark it is... i got hooked on the first paragraph making me read the ...

definitely a good start, though sometimes i found my self re-reading some parts either because i got confused all of a sudden or my mind's flying off somewhere,, though its ...

if i wish not to think rationally, i like the story in its form, the title is definitely catchy, and the darkness to it, my forte! so thumbs up to ...

one thing that i like in the beginning of every story is how it keeps me wondering things, like how'd she died? how old are the characters? and is he ...

hello! see i'm not going to review the story bit by bit, i'll let others do that, ^^, so, what i think as a whole-- the story lacks the need ...

yup, definitely interesting... :lol: i have to agree with EmiAnne there, is Kennee a female? though i think she's a girl, but im not really sure.... :thud: i like the ...

:lol: i suppose the bad boy is Andrew? same as mine, kewl! like the story! i also like how she thought of people as diseases... :twisted: this is worth continuing,, ...

okay! 2nd part! :thud: i wasn't sure if this is ready to be read but i was eager to put the second part up.... i hope i'll be hearing more ...

@jasminebelles/ lavabubblingout now your comments fired me up a bit! thank you! thanks for the suggestions also.. i have the second part already but haven't edited that one a bit, ...

@Sionarama gosh! thx for saying the story is interesting, i am going for that really. yeah, i'm kindda lazy in spelling out words 'coz i just have this trail of ...

this is the First part of my whole story... and this is my First post here in YWS... any comments are very much welcome, now i'm not really good in ...