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Welcome welcome Jen!! :lol: Glad to have you join our wonderful site. I'm Miriam or Foreseer. I'd like to read your stuff. I love teddy grahms, they're delicious! Basically, there's ...

Oooh, tu parles francais? Moi aussi. Thanks to French class, :lol: Welcome to our wonderful site! I'll be sure to read your stuff. How rude of me, I'm Miriam or ...

Hey Alainna! I know how you feel. Welcome to YWS!!! :D Hope your time here is a good one and if you wanna just talk or something you can pm ...

Thanks a lot you guys, like I said I really appreciate it. I did look back and see the errors, thanks for pointing them out. Also, I reviewed it again ...

I feel so welcomed!! :P :D I'm from SoCA

Alright, thanks for reading. I really appreaciate it.

Alright this is my first chapter...hope it's alright. Chapter 1 "Can you keep it down! We're trying to study!" I yelled at the two boys across the room who were ...

Woah! Awsome job with this. I really liked the way you introduced Ellie, nice. I guess it wasn't long enough, 'cause I want to read more. What do you mean ...

Hey thanks for the welcome! Well, I don't know how to surf, I've never tried it really. I'll be sure to PM you! :D

Definately a beginning chapter. Good way to introduce characters. I feel this sets the ground for the rest of the story. Maybe you could put a little something more memorable, ...

LOL! Interesting! I'm from San Diego.

Really liked the introduction, could use a little more discription but it's good. I like the way the intro is going so I can't wait for what's coming next. I'm ...

Interesting....but good. I had just a little bit of trouble following who was telling the story, though. Like what you put in the introduction, setting the ground for the next ...

Wow! Got me hooked with the first sentence. I am really looking forward to reading more! I don't know, but something caught my attention. I mean, some parts I was ...

First I shall say...interesting introduction. I liked it, it grabbed my attention, would very much like to see what happens next. Like Riedawriter23 said, editing is your friend. I think ...