Floydian42

Hmm... nothing really stuck out for me. It seemed to be a bit of a dull read with commonly used bits of imagery in there. Also, try breaking away from ...

I shut my eyes and the cores of earth begin to shake As I watch this transition fall through the stratosphere No, the sky will never fall Instead it will ...

Hmm, thanks to all for the responses! I apologize for the improper grammar, I never was the best at the technic's of it all! And as for the conversation, I ...

Twas good! The opening lines I loved, along with "Cradling her mothers motionless arm." I love implications like that. I don't think there's much wrong with this one, but I'd ...

Invader Zim pwned! I can remember really laughing at the episode when Gir went evil, but I there are no details...

This is my only short story that I at all like. I've tried continuing it and failed, and I've tried sprucing it up, and failed. So, let me know what ...

Wow, I don't seem to have a critique! Great job! So, I guess I might as well say what I liked. I love the change in mood by the end! ...

Heh, many thanks! I'm actually proud of myself for actually understanding everything you said (Auf Deutsch, das ist!)

Many thanks for the welcome! Always good to see a friendly community... Cade: Heh, sorry, I aint' exactly a fan of German. I took it in school and a bunch ...

The sound of sampled waves coming through the speakers Here's a grunge lucidity People dropping ropes With people dangling beneath On the bridge are streets of cars For nothing more ...

Great job! I too, love the imagery you used in this piece! I for one don't have much critique to gives, however, I would like to see a little break ...

Awesome job! This is pretty good stuff here. Although, I must agree with the previous post. Structure adds a great deal, as does proper grammar. Going with the breaks provided ...

Hello! My name is Chris and just finished signing up for this site! I'm 16, and am from New York. I discovered this site when searching on Google for a ...