Flemzo

Near the end, you used "Do not." Do not use "do not" in dialogue unless you have a really formal character! But, as Ted doesn't strike me as formal, and ...

Woo. Short. This could definitely use some expansion. What exactly did the narrator do to make him/her think this way? There definitely seems like there's a backstory that we need ...

I was actually tempted to do a piece by him for speech, but his style of humor, like mine, is really subtle, and if I would've done Kurt, I would've ...

My first question was going to be "Why do you have "Secondhand" in parentheses in nearly every paragraph?" Then I saw your works cited at the end. I'll refrain from ...

Oh my.... I saw the story's length and immediately thought "tl;dr". But I was hooked from the beginning. The story-line was something I normally wouldn't get into, but your characters, ...

Did anyone catch the latest episode of NCIS? If you missed it, you really missed out on a great episode! Agent McGee writes crime novels on the side, and while ...

Bah, global warming is still a "nut-head idea", as you called it. The Earth goes through phases of global warming and global cooling. We just happen to be in an ...

As you may or may not have noticed, I've been absent for about, oh, the last 40 days or so. I gave up the internet for Lent, and it was ...

NOTE: I wrote this story a few months ago in response to learning about a friend who was bulimic. She's since started eating and keeping it down, in part because ...

My only qualm is the quote from Max at the end: “Team sports are over rated, in wrestling when you win, it’s because you’re just better than the other person. ...

Ah... Well maybe you could put "Author's Note" or something before the italicized bit. I thought it was part the piece as well. I'll get on that. Who knows how ...

The backlash led to this. I didnt like this line, it just didnt feel right. Technically, it wasn't part of the piece. I was just giving a little background about ...

AUTHOR'S NOTE: I made the mistake of telling people I'm growing out my moustache. The backlash led to this. I should have listened to them. Really, I should have. But ...

I get "Adam Sandler" most often.... I don't see it, but apparently it's there.

I love being a dork, I think these pictures show that off the best. marching band picture. I'm wearing the costume we wore for our drumline feature. the whistle in ...