Flemzo

As a whole, I like where you're going with this, with a parent adressing their child, trying to relate to them. I like the change of perspective at the end, ...

There is a grammatical error in the chorus ("Somehow this just don't seem right"). It's there to fit the meter I had. So, yes, I've noticed it, and I won't ...

Crit by request! As usual, I'm making notes and crits as I read it, so anything said is usually first thought/suggestion. Sometimes the name they give you is all wrong. ...

Interesting poem. I like the perspective, although I'm sad to say my Daddy would too. (anti-relationship before 35 much?), but your poem's just really good. Although you do seem to ...

We learned kind of differently in my Algebra I class. We were told to, when factoring, to find the "Head" (which, in this case, is 2x^2), the "Tail" (which is ...

Thanks for the crits. I realized that I should've proofread for rhymes along with misspellings and stuff. Should be much better now.

[Prompt was "write a poem about how you feel about valentine's day". Hopefully my message is clear. This is due on, when else, Valentine's Day. 2/14/08: sent it in last ...

"So, you know how sometimes people will be telling you a joke, and it's a really long and rambly joke, and you know it HAS to go SOMEwhere, but then ...

[Been over two months, but here's chapter three! Chapter One , Chapter Two ] CHAPTER THREE The Raven The group resumed their normal roles and continued on down a long, ...

Two German officers crossed the Rhine, parlee-voo, So here hath been dawning A Marchant whilom / dwelled at Seint Denys Say me, viit in the brom, Move him into the ...

How is not wearing a flag pin or putting your hand over your heart during the national anthem unamerican? You shouldn't have to display your patriotism like a freak show. ...

I'm doing a line-by-line crit here, so I'll make corrections and thoughts as I go along. Obviously, he had overdone it a little, and somehow he had ended up… Ended ...

My beloved sudoku.... ;_;

A very enjoyable play. It just puts the whole "my characters are running away with the story" line that writers keep using into tangible evidence. My only thing is that ...

I dorked out and stayed up to watch Obama's victory speech. I'm turning into one of those voters who isn't basing their decision on the issues, but rather the approachability ...