Flemzo

[NOTE: Sorry for the delay with this chapter. I was posting faster than I was writing, and I wasn't critting as often as I used to. So, nearly twenty days ...

I like the opening sequence of events: it sets the mood and atmosphere of the piece, while being humorous (though unintentionally, i'm sure) and interesting at the same time. Great ...

I don't burn, oddly enough. Let me explain: my "burning" is red for about two hours, then it turns into a really dark tan before it peels, leaving sexy, pink, ...

Done sir, pleasure doing business with you.

Sad, sad story. It's a shame that such love can seemingly go to waste. I loved this piece, if only because I'm a sucker for pieces with music incorporated into ...

Still looking for crits... I haven't posted anything in a while because of my lack of critiques.

"We don't like their sound, and guitar music is on the way out." --Decca Recording Co. rejecting the Beatles, 1962. They insulted the Beatles, I feel betrayed :shock: XD :-) ...

SIC - there's a different between sex (within limits, if rated accordingly) and porn... Well I know that, but to support my point, heres a quote from NATE it is ...

NOTE: Have you ever had an idea that was so brilliant that you just had to write it down, only to discover that it only works when spoken out loud? ...

[Griffinkeeper] 9:09 pm: We should rename the fan-fiction forum the "Harry Potter forum. [Flemzo] 9:10 pm: there's fiction other than Harry Potter? Griffinkeeper cries. [Boon] 9:11 pm: Harry Potter is

second submission, because people are lame: [~Volant~] 7:27 pm: Research papers are essay.

it's a tie! holy carp!

Excellent, excellent! Nothing like social commenary on mindless drones. I loved the imagry you had here. I noticed a few puncuation things, minor really, but there's one that's glaring. ...the ...

The sunlight peeked through the blinds and streamed into Arnold’s eyes. He stirred, waving at the sunlight as if it were a physical entity. If it weren’t for his cell ...

I've skimmed through the replies, and I've noticed that no one has bothered to define "addiction". An addiction is defined as a "physiological and psychological desire for something", meaning that ...