Flemzo

The sound of footsteps fills my ears. I stop. I wait. I listen. Normally, I abhor paragraph breaks like this. However, I love it here, because it adds to the ...

So you get up, brush yourself off, and head into the abyss. This line, where to begin. Good Lord, it's amazing. Some people imagine going to Hell flailing and gnashing ...

my virtue remains quite in tact. I believe "intact" is one word. no boy will ever know what lays beneath "what lies beneath." It's a subtle thing, but a thing ...

I'll start off with an admission: I haven't seen Schindler's List. If it was a book first, I've never read it. If it's based on a real person, I've never ...

They are, or once was, so softly asleep Mistake right away: you've mixed up your singular/plural forms. "Once were " Oh, how brilliant were they, Okay, I see what you're ...

I've never heard of tritina, so that's what drew me to this poem. Overall, a very listless poem, which is good here, since it's about drifting along in a canoe. ...

Some of the crowd applauded madly, but most clapped halfheartedly, glowering contemptuously at the stage. Holy adverbs, Batman! That's a lot of -lys all in a row. Too many, in ...

those three words never meant to escape your lips . stupid me , i should have known it hadn't been the first time . I'm highlighting this portion, but the ...

Anderson Cooper, eh? Personally, I'm a fan of the man, but I can see where your coming from. Imagery is powerful, and he knows exactly what to use to get ...

Musty old motel room... defiantly the last place I would have thought I would wake up. Looking for definitely here. Me, a straight A college student majoring in Law at ...

Perfect. I've been on a historical fiction kick recently. "...Just go sit down on that bench, okay?” She asked. Simple slip. A quick proofread will catch little mistakes like this. ...

Housing our lives; our loves, our passions. Hiding our hates; our lusts; our discontempts. I'm a bit of a semicolon stickler. And what I see here is a gross violation ...

I read this out loud, since you mentioned it was spoken word. It adds a whole layer of imagery to the piece, which I definitely love, especially the "crisp crackle ...

I couldn't find anything grammatically wrong, nor could I find anything wrong with the punctuation. The one thing that bothered me, thought, was the name choice: Angel. Doesn't exactly sound ...

Team Shamrocker Ahoy! First thoughts and suggestions as I go along. Right off the bat, "clean to the touch" is a weird way to describe someone's lips, expecially when you're ...