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I have to agree with BeKWithaK. Too many people these days are too criticizing of those who aren't honest about who they are. And those same people are also overly ...

:roll: You've done it yet again! One thing that bothered me right away is that you don't know right away what's being written or thought. Maybe for what they write, ...

I agree with Empress about the secrets thing. You should let us find out more about who Ayden is and maybe a bit more of what he enjoys. Yes, you ...

:thud: Amazing! Loved the short sentence style and everything. The only nitpicks I have are already said so I'm not going to repeat them. GREAT JOB!!!

This was fantastic! No nitpicks left to do. Everyone else did a good job of it. I like this. You should do more. Alex

I think most of the nitpicking was done by Kibble. A lot of grammatical errors. And befuzzled isn't even a word. Not that I know of. I think you mean ...

This is fantastic. Chocoholic, it was Barabbus. I'm a Christian. I would know. DW, it's a bit confusing as to who is talking so try to fix that. As Sam ...

This was fantastic! One thing that I felt wasn't right. She had been sobbing quietly when Leroy had sat beside her and with such tenderness asked her what was wrong. ...

Ok. I was just told by DW that there is no rule about this stuff. I guess I was wrong. Sorry. Anyway, DW just informed me that it's a "he" ...

This is great! I can't really find anything wrong with it. I like that you suddenly hit us that she's homosexual at the end but um... Isn't there a rule ...

This is great! I can't really find anything to nitpick about. Maybe other people will... I don't know. Alex

I agree with the other reviewers that the mother part was confusing... Why would he say, "I'll be there in a minute" then have sex with Helen? I've had no ...

I've never seen anything like this! I like it. Even without the other half of the conversation, we could still understand what the other person was saying. Great job! Shame ...

This is great! I liked the verses. This seems like someone who's lost someone who he or she loved and wants them to come back. That last part... [Exit Verse] ...

This is great! All nitpicks have already been done. So there's nothing for me to say except this was well-done. Keep the good work up. Alex