Fizz

Constructive it is :) lies a secret-- deep within. This sounds a little bit cliché. You hear a lot about things deep within hearts. Especially secrets. I can see the ...

I totally agree, flirting is harmless. I think it's how we create easy going rapport with somebody, it's basically what friendships are made of! I don't think it means you ...

Agreed. Full stops make reading a lot easier. Unless you want it to sound rushed, like one long stream of thought. But really, it was quite distracting. I think it ...

This is really sad. So sad. I think you have a really great grasp of language, especially emotive imagery. I can't see much to criticise about this, except to make ...

I don't think it fits in to any kind of writing. Probably because it makes no sense. Have you ever been in that state of mind where your thoughts...'race and ...

Her lip twitched. It twitched. It twitched and twitched and twitched. It twitched. It twitched. She twitched. It twitched. She sat still. She fidgeted. It twitched. Caffeine is a drug. ...

There are a number of things about this discussion that trouble me so so so SO greatly. Mostly, it is this thing about wages all being the same, and how ...

The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day. These days filled Matthaus' mind with thoughts of his childhood home in Rostock, ...

I really love this, the imagery is great. This is going to be a terrible review, but I needed to say that I too think some of the earlier advice ...

I have to agree that the format is a little bit confusing, but I think it just needs a bit of fine tuning. I can see that the sense of ...

EXCUSE ME??!! That was so beautiful. I honestly loved it, I read it three times. I liked the way you used structure to give the poem a great sense of ...

Sometimes it's okay for there to be no plot. Things don't have to make sense and the reader doesn't have to 'get it'. Sometimes it's good to keep readers thinking, ...

She would often think about murder. She would wonder how it must feel, to want to kill somebody. She wondered how someone reached the point where they are murdering their ...

I think this is really adorable. The characters are very cartoon-ish, in that they seem to be exaggerated versions of real people, but that isn't a bad thing. It makes ...

Hey, my name is Fizz (no jokes, that is really my name) and I'm a University student in Australia. I'm currently at Music School, but I'm really passionate about writing ...