Fireweed

This is a bit mushy for my taste, but my sister insisted i put it on here. I considered putting it in romantic fiction, put i decided it was more ...

i like this alot, its really unique and has beautiful imagery. it gets a little repetitive though, cuz every sentence starts with "I." but its really good. i would definitely ...

Beautiful... I like the way it flows, it made me feel really... quiet. im a music freak and i know it sounds corny but i really understand what you said ...

awwwww, poor lump!! i feel bad for him in the begginning when all he can do is cry!!! :cry: This is very creative and well written, you should definetly finish ...

I liked this a lot... true it was short, but shorts okay if its a good poem, and it is. some times poems will sound awkward if you add onto ...

thanks everybody, especially jennafina... psylynx, you confuse me!! easily for the last line, i originally wasnt going to put it, but my sister said the poem wasnt long enough or ...

HI JANE!!! WELCOME TO YWS!!!!!!! :mrgreen: AWSOME poem as usual... i love the rythym, the ryhme, the mood of it, everything... great. i would not change anything at all. i ...

COOL :thumb:

hey peace out everybody

A red balloon came drifting by, floating free through the saphire sky. The chickadees chirp, The turtledoves croon, "Where are you off to, red balloon?" East of the sun and ...

Hey big sista!!!! :D This is really sweet... wonderful imagery.... i like how the ryhme is sort of subtle, it doesnt distract you from the story of the poem. i ...

this is a really intresting poem... you described everything really beautifully and I like the way you worded it. the rhyming seemed a little bit sing-songy or dr. seussish or ...

WOW this is really beautiful... I love the first line and I like how you repeated it at the end.

At the crack of dawn the fog came down and gave the earth a gossamer gown. Like angels hair it filled the air, the trees were an evergreen comb. It ...