Fireweed

Feh... this is quite old, I hoped no one would bring it up again; I'm a bit embarassed by it. It's pretty childish... I hope my writing's somewhat more mature ...

Lovely rhyme and images in the first stanza; in the second, the rhyme seemed a bit forced and I think the rhythm got messed up. It could be longer, but ...

Okay, I get it now. Sorry! :)

I love the new look, and the logo is cool but SERIOUSLY needs an apostrophe. It's driving me insane... But this site is indeed quite awesome. :D :) 8) :mrgreen: ...

I liked this; it flowed well and had good rhyme & repetition, and a serene, soothing feel. This is minor, but in the fifth stanza I think "lost soul" would ...

Don't forget "poppet"... That's british, I think...

I think it's good to draw inspiration from books/movies/ poems/whatever that you admire and use other's work as springboards for your own, but it's true that you have to be ...

Very sweet. I love the stanza with the metaphors about oceans and bridges and islands.

I like! Especially the first 2 lines. You captured your passion without any unneccasary words, which I know is much more difficult than it sounds. Kudos!! :pig:

Twas very funny and sweet. James and Maxine are very realistic characters.

wow khayriyyha, that's a stunning photo.

Yes, rather cliche, but there were a couple really lovely phrases and images. Maybe you could kind of filter out the unoriginal parts and work with the better bits? :)

I like these alot. Usually haikus bug me, but these are clever and thoughtful.

Standard... its purdier and dark is distracting.

feh... I hate the term raghead...