Fireweed

This was quite sweet, and I loved your descriptions of the sunset and the night sky and the acres of farmland, I could see them all clearly. Throughout the entire ...

Okay, here's a wee bit more. Sorry it took so long. Imp and Misty, thanks again for your lovely critiques. They were both very nice and helpful, and I really ...

You sound quite a bit like me... I'm a flute player. I love music and writing. I absolutely HATE, DETEST, and DESPISE P.E. I absolutely LOVE and ADORE English because ...

This is a very good beginning... Darker than what I personally like to read and write, but that doesn't make it any less well-written. Just make sure that the violence ...

The pirate chick is so AWESOME!!! *is jealous* These are all really cool, especially the pirate and the ninja.

That sounds interesting; I love books about girls in other times and cultures. But if it's too terribly graphic, I'll wait... I'll try to remember the title till I'm 16. ...

Thank you so much!! I'll probably post more tomorrow...

I really like what you have so far. Audrey seems like the kind of spunky, adventurous heroine that I love. I'd love to see what happens to her and her ...

Nice... l really like the format of sonnets, and this also had nice imagery. A typo: I think in the 2nd to last line, you meant to say, " Why ...

Thank you, that was very helpful. ^_^ I do tend to get a bit carried away with description. I'll try to get rid of some of the unneeded adjectives.

Sounds interesting, perhaps I'll check it out...

Wow. This is depressing, but very well-written, original and interesting. Your descriptions are very vivid. I don't have any negative feedback on this, just praise. Cheers! 8)

Wow, thank you!! I wasn't expecting that kind of praise for this. Thanks alot. :) I'll post more soon... Any other comments on the beginning are welcome!!

'Ello there! :D

It was an afternoon in late Autumn. The air was frigid and the wind bitter. It blew in fierce little gusts, penetrating the old man's thin, worn coat and sending ...