Firestar

"Bark Bark ruff ruff." "What's that Lassie, there's uncontrolled mitotic cell division in my prostrate?" Sure Dog's can tell when they're in bad shape, but no way can they detect ...

Firstly it doesn't mean a thing, if a it did it's business on a McCain sign would it mean the same. This is a ridiculous attack. I thought, I really ...

8/10 lol

5/10 kinda creepy. And not in a good way.

Awesome!!!! Boy you must have really worked on this, it read just like an Alex Rider book in my eyes. Keep up the good work!!!

Oh yeah!!! I love this series. (But I kinda wish that Alex would have died in the fifth.)

8.5/10 LOL

8/10 Nice!!

6/10 Okay I guess.

Pencil

7/10 Okay??

Flip- "At least I remembered to grab something useful," I said meekly, pulling out a first aid pouch.

I found it very rough and bumpy. Also there's some punctuation missing.

9/10

Zianna?