Firestalker

Wow you really got researching didn't you. Great!!

Too short and boring. Continue it and i will praise and critique you.

cool i like stars

Its really good, but expand it please.

I agree. you started it good, but ended it bad. Try improving.

Better, great, fantastic wow!!

Eragon, Eldest, HP, etd

Sorry i dont like the story. Its unclear and well boring. Try improving, i would like if you would improve it, please.

Yup your right. I think whats missing is a introduction about the characters since the readers would get confused reading this.

NO!!!! Improve the plot to get deeper. Eg - as Ella goes through the 'wizard lands' she discovers some thing that that will change her life for ever etc. Other ...

Its a good story. I got to hand it out to you. Continue it. All i can say is improve your grammer.

"i suppose you heard about a gang trying to enter the fortress?" asked Ladreal "Yeah so what?" she replied "I am one of them and offering you to help me" ...

I dont know if this is my computer. I'm in the YWS chimped out theme and when i try to go to the [interactive] underLitarary this message pops in a ...

The good thing about this was that i finally found out how attached i was to YWS.

A.k 5 levitated towards were the scent came from. He could not teleport since he did not know where exactly the others were. A.k 5 landed almost exhausted. He stretched ...