Firestalker

WOW you must be very experienced. No mistakes as far as i can see. Thats a extremely explained story. what can i say other than say its magnificent and that ...

Here my critique Breathing softly I did my best to resist the temptation to sneeze. Dust had risen in the air and my allergies were subdued with patience that had ...

*we will see :wink: :wink: * I smiled again. One of my rules was never hunt unless it is essential, let your prey come to you, and then you will ...

How very interesting. A Vampyre and a Vampyre hunter kissing, A Vampyre who hunts its own kind. And a hunter with a cold heart all inside the vampyre den not ...

I looked around. i could smell more vampires. A lot of them which meant there was a vampire den close by. I was hungry since hadn't feasted in a few ...

Hey there hope i am not interrupting heres my character profile Name - Zire (no second name as he never knew his parents) Age - looks 21 but really about ...

The lightning lit the sky with a deafening crack in perfect unison with the booming thunder and the constant downpour. Thunderstorms are said to keep people awake at night or ...

Hey Jamie who rocks and writes rocking stories Heres my Critique hope you like it King Ofusa nodded, “She’ll be safe there. As soon as the battle is won, we ...

Well the story was good and so was the style you wrote it but it seemed a little hmmmmmmm well a little well anyway there is something missing. As if ...

oh my god :shock: That was the best story i've read on Lycans and Vampires in years. The detail was enormous but somehow balanced so it would not make the ...

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :shock: :shock: First of all the good news. the story has a good plot but the last part gave me a little anger against the character. Anyway. They story ...

Well as far as i know JabberHut already pointed out all the mistakes. Like JabberHut i am really curious about the cat but i have my theories about the rest ...

of course there are better books out there. Who the hell would think Eldest and Eragon where and are the best books in the world. Use your brains. (just kidding) ...

**Guys remember everyone does not know we are from different territories** Lee Veelox "So where to now?" Lee asked "Now we go inside th caves" replied Senna "Huh?" Lee said ...

*That i cant do. Ask someone who's character is in cloral** "easy, Just climb on them and then say start and then lean to the opposite side of where you ...