Firearris

Hi dove! I think you need to space out paragraph seven a bit more. After you do that, PM me and I will crit it for you. :D Firearris

Hi M.B. Author! For one thing, I think you need to split this up into paragraphs, but here are my comments: Teeny-Wee did get better. But How about this: Teeny-Wee ...

:shock: WOW! Big block of text! Yikes! I really think you should divide this up into paragraphs, then PM me and I will crit this for you. :D Firearris :D

Hi Kyte! I am very interested in this piece....here are my comments: I managed. Maybe you should change it to: I managed to say. I had already made up my ...

Hi thunder_dude! I like this piece, the main thing that bugs me is that it is a bit long, maybe you could shorten this post up? The four 13 year ...

Here is an idea for a plot: When they are short of food to hunt, they go looking for better territory but run into the bloody mount pack, who are ...

Name: Kirany Gender: Female Pack: Red oak Rank: None…just a normal female. Age: 2 years Description: White coat, almost yellow and black eyes. Attitude: Kind but strong. Mate: Looking Pups: ...

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I am a prisoner, and I think I would sacrifice everything except for Susan, she is my only real family. ~ Beth I don't think I have anything to sacrifice, ...

I think it is fine, however, I have been locked up too long so I can't say on modern technology. ~ Beth I don't know. ~ Susan Are you in ...

Canis: Your alpha male is a mystic, right?

Hi Kitty! One of my problems with this piece is that you can't tell who says what in a few spots. The funny thing is, today I just finished reading: ...

Hi everybody! When I joined YWS, I was nine years old and was expecting people to base their critiques off of my age and treat me different because of it; ...

every year, lives are lost for the first word, capitalize it. Put a coma or period after "lost". With this poem, just about every two lines you need a capitalized ...