FinalFreedom

Jaime Jaime giggled to himself as Caydence slid off her chair and onto the floor. Football manager, huh. Smiling, he sunk back into his chair, looking over at Liam. "Your ...

First of all, good job on your first fantasy! Now to the review. Joanna looked around the vast chamber that imprisoned her. The survivors huddled in small groups around her. ...

I must comment on the sentence structure. The story itself was well written and well played out, but I noticed too many periods where comma's could have been. It is ...

Jaime Jaime moved over one seat so Liam could sit beside Cameron. "So Liam, are you going to play football this year? Hear you're a pretty fast runner!" Cameron nudged ...

Jaime "Jaime Padden!" Jaime scanned the crowd, noticing Mr. Henfengalf rushing to him. He grumbled. "Hello, Mr. Henfengalf." He said, standing up. Mr. Henfengalf put his hand on Jaime's arm, ...

Jaime Jaime stood in front of the large auditorium doors, standing just enough out of the way so that students could file through. Right there, on a poster plastered to ...

Brahn: Brahn heard the sound of clashing weapons and barking wolves behind him, and turned to find a large pack of wolves attacking the group. He smirked. "Frost!" He called ...

Brahn, 18, Captive of the Shadows Brahn averted his gaze as this Night Queen looked at him. She walked up to him and grabbed his chin. "Hmmm, handsome indeed. I ...

Brahn, 18, Captive of the Shadows Brahn sighed, struggling to loosen the bonds around his wrists. The sound of Frost's voice lingered in his mind, the obvious fear and worry ...

Brahn, 18, Night Lands "Hey, stop!" He yelled, drawing Addison's attention as Wesley and Erin approached. "That Nathaniel person said it was about separation, and we all know well enough ...

Brahn, 18, Night Lands, In A Cave "Hey Wesley, quit it with the water works, this is no time for them." Brahn shifted his eyes as everyone in the cave ...

*double post, stupid internet lag -.-' I changed it, sorry >

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Brahn, 18, Night Lands "Get to the back of the cave, keep yourself hidden." Brahn said to Frost, grabbing his blades from their sheaths and walking out of the cave. ...

Brahn, 18, Night Lands Brahn quickly stood up while Frost explained her leave to Shinar, walking slightly into the bush, rubbing the bump on his head from where it had ...