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Here it is ... Enjoy! Every single comment is welcome! He was dying… He was crushed and Ashea’s voice was calling him in vain. A thread of blood was streaming ...

Well it`s not very much to say. The idea is good but many would prefer to make it bigger o.O . Speak about how he got in that situation. Why ...

...Hic! Woaw ... I actually was holding my breath as i was reading. Your writings are amazing. Nice descriptions, great idea with the beggar in the end... Its perfect if ...

Ok here we go! 1) Describe more of the feeling that Remus gets when he sees the shadow. Ok he saw animals before. "The form of the shadow was human-like. ...

Welcome on the forum! I`m looking forward to see your writings around here. Good luck!

For a prologue this is well done but i would suggest to improve your descriptions. 1) I don't know your main idea so i suggest that the first part would ...

Ha ha. Good point there with the soft and warm bed! Its a very nice little story. It gives me that feeling that you wrote it when you were half-asleep ...

Great idea! It a bitter-sweet feeling there that i like. I actually like the poem because it dosent have rhyme... The sand story of the ending of life. the violent ...

OK nice idea not saying anything about that, but indeed nothing is perfect as piepiemann22 said. Try avoiding repeating the same words in a big sentence as "each other - ...

I like it. The rhymes are fit. Overall its a nice poem. One problem ... This poem will fit a fantasy book when the main character is laying down on ...

Ok. Here is what i think you should do. 1)- I would suggest you describe Andrea more. How she moved, why she was a super hero. Skinny - Eh she ...

Very nice description of the woman. Many writers attempt to write only good things about their chars. Anyway nice starting idea as well.

Hey! Welcome ! Start writing :) !

My longest writing was around 800,000 words, but it was a "little" story ... and i haven't finish it yet so have a little patience will ya?

Great! Your idea is very well "explained" if i may say so. I mean - you said everything that is to say about the feeling on that battleground and about ...