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Hey - thanks for the comments, I forgot to mention at the start that it is part of a longer piece!! :) My mistake ha ha :) It's meant to ...

I can see exactly what you mean! The next part of this chapter, 1.2, has a more fast-paced part to it, and this did originally have a captivating start-point, which ...

As soon as I saw the "slammed the door open " I cringed!! I can't believe I missed that!! :) I've got the next part ready now, so I'll post ...

Thanks for the feed back - I can see exactly what you mean, I have been considering altering the over-descriptive sections, but I thought it was best to post it ...