Fatimah

Thankyou Masquerade, I appreciate your comment! I have changed the line you advised me to, which made the last paragraph more fluent when read so thanks for that :) I ...

Hey retrodisco666, I really enjoyed this poem, it was touchy and there wasn't too much emotion included which I felt made the poem more strong as it wasn't needed. I ...

Great poem Undertaker! I like the fact that it is short and simple which makes it catchy. However, this sentence doesn't quite sound right to me: ' An exciting adventures ...

To retrodisco666, Thanks for your comment. I do agree with your point, as I literally changed the structure of the poem when typing it in, as I thought the extra ...

Thankyou xangeleighfshox and GAM, I appreciate your comments :)

Try giving more reviews it will help with your feedback on your submitted poems! It definitely helped me :)

Hi EleanorRigby, I've got three words to describe what I think about this poem, 'Arw how nice.' This is so true, and I'm guessing you are relating a butterfly to ...

Great work at 14 years! Try to use punctuations such as commas and full-stops when writing your poems, this poem is sort of breathless when reading as it has no ...

Thankyou Huthaifa :)

I like what you wrote it can be easily related to and you're only 14! ' I ache to see you’re gorgeousness, To breathe in you’re calming smell, To feel ...

I like what you wrote it can be easily related to and you're only 14! ' I ache to see you’re gorgeousness, To breathe in you’re calming smell, To feel ...

Hi Huthaifa, I quite like this poem, however I'd like to make a few suggestions; 'Am sorry for being like the flu, Hurting, disturbing and bothering you, Am sorry for ...

Not a day goes by, Where I don't think about you; That's how I know, What I feel is true. The way I care for you, No words can explain; ...

Everywhere I go, I don't seem to fit in; I feel self-conscious, In the places i'm in. Eyes see me, They guess i'm a certain way; Their thoughts then change, ...

Wow, I really like this poem :) I can visualise what you are saying.. I adore the fact that parts of the poem can be related to personal experiences, such ...