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This is absolutely gorgeous, Ed! I love the imagery here, especially: "The river bent up with your mouth, and you / sank, sank past your feet." There are a few ...

Oh dear. #1. You've tried to use punctuation creatively here, but you've just ended up fracturing your phrases absurdly. You lose all sense of continuity and rhythm; the reader is ...

Welcome, Medusa! Your notes on religion are truly fascinating. I'd love to talk to you about the Islamic roots in there at some point; I just went to a mosque ...

Poise! *Pop*-oh-ee-zz.

General rule of thumb: if you instinctively add a note that your poem is mindless and has no purpose, it should be posted in your blog, and no where else.

I think Snoink got it spot on--the one thing this poem is missing is subtlety. And a period at the end of the first stanza. Yes, that bothered me quite ...

Are you implying that there are certain things I should or should not want to know?

Hello, my name is Crispin Hardy, and I'd appreciate it very much if you'd get your sodding nose out of my business.

Sodapop pointed out all of the typos that I spotted. The monologue wasn't bad, but it also lacked something compelling. It didn't seem to go much deeper than the surface. ...

First of all--brava! This is a wonderful little play; skillfully written and obviously well thought out. One of the best I've ever read on the site. I laughed aloud at ...

Hmm. I generally enjoyed this a lot, but there were two things that brought the quality down in my opinion. #1. "Love: [Turns around to show a sleeping head attached ...

I'm afraid the errors here are just too elementary for me to take this script seriously. Aside from the spelling and grammatical errors, though, the script seemed decent enough; predictable, ...

I do love how you bring the episode full-circle with the mouse joke. ^_^ I am, however, still a little concerned about the "inking" line when they come back to ...

Oh dear. The Lord of the Rings strikes again! A Gondorian, I believe. Fand.

Hello, my name is Benjamin Barrow, and I would like to reiterate--most emphatically--that I am not a god.