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I don't usually like rhyming poem; they often come across as very flat. Yours had much more shape than most. Also, Kitty keeps stealing my comments before I can even ...

Kitty grabbed the typos, so I won't mention those, I s'pose. Personally the repetition got a little heavy for me; it became unwieldy. I'd suggest scaling back on that point. ...

I'll admit, the first time I read through this, I was ambivalent. Then I read it again, and I began to like it. A third time through and, though there ...

Goose has a brother? Goose has a brother! Welcome to YWS Goose's brother Pol! ^_^ Hope you enjoy it, and I'd offer to have you PM me any questions, but ...

This is definitely the work of a fourteen-year-old, lol. I have to admit, I was incredibly relieved when I saw that note at the end of the poem--otherwise I would've ...

The problem with this poem--well, one of them, at least--is that you're telling, not showing. Don't tell me that the person the narrator is speaking with has embraced the narrator; ...

I agree. As lyrics, these have potential; as poems, absolutely none. Reclassify, and keep writing!

Very pop-song like. I could easily hear Lindsay Lohan singing this. And no, that was not a compliment. Also, it's "paparazzi."

Gorgeous. Brad seems to have stolen my comments before I even thought of them, so I'll leave my comment at that. Also, I'm a big proponent of punctuation in poetry, ...

The Paladin of Punctuation strikes again! The first thing I noticed about this was, quite predictably, how you used punctuation. It's a typical mistake for young poets, and one quite ...

Well, if your aim was simply to create a functional villanelle, following all the rules, you succeeded. If, however, you were hoping to create a poem that had some sort ...

I don't know what possessed me to do it. I think I'll just say that fatigue had clouded my judgment, and leave it at that. No matter how I write ...

Angie went to high school with a lot of the college kids, and is relatively good friends with Adara and Mev. She really thinks herself above a lot of the ...

Why does this not have more reviews? Gorgeous, Bek. I think "shotty" might actually be "shoddy," but other than that, I really love this poem. It's got a great rhythm ...

I definitely disagree with kitty. There's no hard-and-fast rule that says all poetry must begin each line with a capitalized letter; it's a personal preference to the utmost degree. As ...