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It's not bad, and it looks like a lot of the nitpicks have already been taken care of, so I'll just add my own two cents, shall I? The concept ...

Pulchritudinous is an amazing word. Just... not for a poem. As Snoink says about, it's incredibly unpoetic. And it also makes the reader stop, think, and wonder what the heck ...

ACK! Block of text. Try spacing out the paragraphs and making it easier, or no one will be able to read this.

Your imagery is gorgeously vibrant as ever, Bradikins, and I loved how the peaceful feeling of the first two stanzas (in my head, "Glosoli" by Sigur Ros was playing) gradually ...

[ Went back to my hometown for a weekend; you wouldn't believe the memories it evoked. I felt like an eight-year-old playing in my neighbor's attic again, and pretending I ...

Lovely, Fab. "Heroin Chic" is definitely my favorite--you caught the moment beautifully.

You know, I think this might actually work better recast as prose. Prose doesn't have to be straightforward--take a look at William Faulkner or Janet Fitch for good examples of ...

I third Crysi and Ed. You need to do some serious study of poetry before you can really write it. Your imagery, as has been said, is trite: in other ...

^ lucky Jack, indeed! 9/10

If you don't have patience for waiting, try PMing writers you respect to request critiques, or putting a link in your signature. ;) No bumping! *Slaps bianca's wrist.*

The edit is much better! I've got a few more suggestions to make, though; this poem has quite a lot of potential, so I'd like to see you really perfect ...

Your imagery and the concept are lovely, but the length of the lines kind of beats down any possible flow--shorten them, make your statements more concise, and try again. A ...

The poem itself is rather weak, but I love the message behind it--it's really a very accurate representation of a sisterly bond. I'd suggest paying more attention to the rhythm ...

This is... yes, well. I second everything Brad said. This one even fails to be vaguely amusing, as some of your other sillier ones were. If you're not serious about ...

:lol: I liked this one, Anna. Very amusing. However, I can't help but wonder why you structured the first stanza the way you did, when it follows the same patterns ...