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10/10: I wholeheartedly agree. There's just something magical about red ink. ^_^

^^ Thanks, Tony. There is a play on jingle in here, juxtaposing the word's links to both money and advertising; maybe I need to clarify that? Anyway, that's where the ...

...There are three exclamation points in your title. And eight in your poem. And seven ellipses. I'm so going to sic Incandescence on you. (And if you don't know who ...

Well, it was amusing, and I liked the message you were trying to convey. The rhythm was way off, though, and I felt like you could do a lot more ...

"When you look right me." - There should be an "at" in this sentence, either in place of the "right," or following it. "Do you see who I really am? ...

The tenses in this poem are really very wonky. Typically--though I'm not entirely sure it's not grammatically correct--one would never see "I wish I can ." It's always, "I wish ...

My summer job is actually an internship (a paying internship, thank deity) at the Federal Emergency Management Agency (FEMA). Yes, that one. Do not address complaints to me, as I'm ...

Hope you don't mind, but I'm going to print this out and mark it up during my hour-and-change commute home. ^~ I need something to keep me busy! - will ...

The world was dark when Lord bore took over the world. ...Yeah, Clau's right. One of those "the worlds" has to go. I hope you continue this--with your senses of ...

Hello, this is— How may I help you today? Is it a matter of life and death, or the hum of pocket jingles? Breathe in deep—smell the coffee, ignore the ...

The spacing between the lines is a real turn-off for most poets; why did you space them like that? Was there a reasoning behind it? Also, I'd agree that this ...

I agree that the linebreaks and imagery could do with a little caffeine--but I loved this, otherwise. ^^ That line about the thirty silver pieces, was it worth it--gorgeous! ^^ ...

I do believe you may be my favorite poet on this site, gummy. ^^ This is positively humming with imagery--even if there are a few spots in which the punctuation ...

I actually rather adored this. ^^ Beautiful, Gummy; that last stanza, particularly, is chock full of absolutely gorgeous imagery.

You go too indepth with your images; you don't have to describe everything to us. Sometimes images are actually made stronger when you only hint at something, and the reader ...