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Harsh crit? No prob! Here we go, stanza by stanza. ^_^ Some things make the most sense on a bleary morning, their shadows dark and clear against the fog, that ...

To expand a little on what iQuippie said, lol: Punctuation is, believe it or not, a poet's best friend. A lot of people think it's passe; I mean, gawd, people ...

First of all--punctuation! Now, I'm all for breaking with convention, but punctuation in poetry isn't just a convention: it's just good common sense. Face it--as important as the words are, ...

I'm not a huge fan of William Carlos Williams, but I think this is fantastic. I love the interjections--it makes it feel like more of a conversation than anything else, ...

She didn't trust him. She didn't like him. She was pretty certain she'd kill him with, if not a smile on her face, at least a sense of satisfaction. Sure, ...

First of all, Guinevere needs to get to Camelot from Cameliard. I'm thinking that maybe Aubrey could come along to accompany her? Given the time period she would probably be ...

Just curious--motherflippinflapjacks posted as a nymph, and you said there are no humanoid magical creatures. Perhaps she should try again with a different character? Also: looks like Guinevere's age

Name and title: Guinevere, Princess of Cameliard Class: awfully high. ^_^ Age: 15 Appearance: Short for her age, appears to be several years younger; she has wavy/curly, mostly unmanageable auburn ...

Finn sat away from the others, not far from the entrance to the cave; she watched Becky and Valin battle back and forth for a few minutes before resting her ...

I disagree with Misty; I think the fact that your meaning is so difficult to find--the fact that it seems so arbitrary--really gives this piece its strength. I gave you ...

...Vernon, that's really unnecessary. Claudette was giving Elizabeth constructive advice, which is what YWS is for. Please don't be unnecessarily partisan. As to the poem: I agree that the lack ...

Aye! I like it. Dono and... *thinks* Imp, I think. Dono + Imp would be a fantastic couple! So, who am I matched with, then?

NAME: Sebastian Courtland IV AGE: 18 EDUCATION: graduated from the Fiorello H. LaGuardia High School of Music and Performing Arts (NYC) at the age of 16, now entering his sophomore ...

This poem was an exercise in cliche and repetition. Scrap it and start over. Cheers.

I have to say, this is one of the clearest and most vivid poems I've read of yours, gummy. While all of your images are gorgeous, you tend to overstuff ...