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Suddenly he woke up. His hand reached for his sword, but he stayed it. Someone was approaching and he wanted to know who and why before he did anything. Another ...

Thanks for all of your opinions. Made some minor changes as some of you suggested. I'll have part 2 up by the end of the week.

I hope you like it. I'm more comfortable doing fantasy pieces so I picked this.

There were three horses and four men, one in fancy armor and pounding at the door. This sentence sounds a little awkward. Maybe 'one of whom was in fancy armour' ...

Potrait of a life Sorry if it seems rather brief. I can't really think of much for poems and every one else had already taken most of the things to ...

I thought this poem was beautiful. It expresses what we lose after we have stopped become innocent children very well as well as memories shared with the people we call ...

Quite good apart from one thing that really got to me. Your first paragraph. When I first saw it I was about to dismiss it as one of those always ...

Reminds of something liek the movie Run, fat boy, run (the guy wasn't even fat). A guy or girl who doesn't try to hard in life has to learn that ...

I have one of those names that will always be mispronounced in the most embaressing moments. And why surname...well lets just say that I share it with a thousands in ...

I've put up chapter 1 of my re-write if anyone wants to read it.

Well, this certainly kept my attention throughout the whole thing and during 7:21 in the morning it isn't an easy thing to do! I thought that the pace was pretty ...

Ah, about the point with armour. In this world, battle technology has taken a strange twist. To avoid any more misunderstandings, I suppose I should talk about porting. Porting is ...

In full with major edits at:

Beginning one One man was at the bow of his ship, telescope focused on another in front of him. Buck Bret, Privateer of North Rhynadie, had sighted prey. The ship ...

I might once I've finished with my first rewrite, fisnished my draft a few days ago, I'm cleaning up chapter 3...