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My main quibble (or great rant) with this is that it is all telling. That's a big no-no. Don't be discouraged by this comment though, I'll give you some tips. ...

Hello, kinoeslayer :) . I'll start off with a line-by-line. She wanted to be ready if something came near that didn’t sound like her little, furry friend. Using the 'her' ...

I know what will spark this: emo girl and nerd boy! ~ Rylie. *waves a 'magic wand'* What's an emo? What's a nerd? ~ Elayna. Well, apparently emos are dark ...

Just the one then. As I said before, the glasses are eskew because they are broken (you might notice the tape).

Altough I didn't request this, it's pretty good information fishr. Almost all of the teachers in my boarding school are Masons, and there's a student joke that they're all in ...

A Winston Churchill quote. Great for pulling me in :wink: . Although gyr and Smurf have sorted it throughly with precision, I felt like I need to add my two ...

I've finally gotten around to making the changes you suggested. I can't believe I missed the punctuation x_x. A salute to all you helpful people!

This is coolm I've always wanted to know what some people looked like. Yes, I know my glasses are eskew. But they're broken. (You might notice the tape on the ...

Monday 17th December '07. I'm brimming to the ears with joy because I'm back with you lovely people again! Even the having the revise for tests part can't mar this. ...

ouch. Talk about unlucky. ~Fan~

rawr! ~Fan~

By structure, it's referring to how you put your piece together. For example, for poems, are you doing it stanza by stanza? My tip on poems would be do a ...

I'm afriad you've spelt the title wrong: 'dying' , not 'dieing'; 'cross out the -e and add -ing' eh? I've got to pick up on the first line: My tetrouse ...

Summer danced, As the sun beamed down, On the grassy plain. Along the stream she went, With no care in the world. Summer wept, And the rain came down. It ...