Falcon_Ablaze

In regards to the "My Friends"thing on my profile, what does that do? Does it just say So and So is my friend or does it do something else as ...

Oops! Sorry. I just realized that my MC's name spelled different ways. Its supposed to be spelled Cuilén.

Hi, This is a very rough draft of chapter 1 of my first story. Any critiques would be more than welcome :D ! Don't be afraid to go tough :wink:. ...

Hi, Sorry I didn't get to these sooner. It's been a bit hectic at my house. I'll start with chapter two. After I roared, I charged the two half dragons. ...

Hi, Sorry I didn't get to this sooner. It's been a bit chaodic at my house. I'll start with chapter one. After I roared, I charged the two half dragons. ...

Grrrrrrrrr!! :x :x *Shakes computer. Regains composure* OK, I'm going to try this again since my computer kinda went haywire. Now that I'm bright eyed and bushy tailed (sorta :) ...

Hi Stupidiot92, I just browsed over this and it looks very interesting :) . I guess I'll start with with the prologue (that would make sense, right? :wink: ). Some ...

Hi, I just browsed over this and it looks good to me. It's nice to see someone interested in the environment :) . My only suggestions are: Although, it actually ...

Hey there FireArris, You've got a pretty good start here. I, as well LOVE Dragons :P ! Here are some of my suggestions: “GO KIRANIA! GO!” Tamada shouted to the ...

Hi Pawprint, Most of what I saw was minor typo's e.g. missing a space, "I" not capitalized. Also, since in your dialog your using "Mother" as a name, you should ...

Okay, Okay, I know what all of you are thinking. "This is really long and really boring". I've given this speech to 200 people and only three or four have ...

Hello Glenn, Greetings and Salutations. Welcome to YWS! Everyone here is very nice (we don't bite too hard : P). Wow, you write in Spanish? That's awesome. What do you ...

*Waves* Hello All, Thank you for the warm welcomes. I like to write about the dark ages and early to mid 1800's but WWII is a very interesting period as ...

Over one million acres of farm and ranch land is lost each year, potentially losing over 11 million pounds of beef production annually. The loss of farm and ranch land ...

Hello Jonny911, My congratulations on a well written piece. You made Anne a very real and lovable character. Underlined below are my suggestions and questions. Anne Taylor is not a ...