Fael57

Hello ladies and gents, top of the morning (or evening) to you! Although I doubt any of you remember me, I was a member of this site 3 or 4 ...

I believe the yellow pole is actually one of those plastic tubes that goes around a power line cable that is connected to the ground. I have one just outside ...

The alien theme is a bit cliche, and so is the terrifying aliens doing surgery on the helpless specimen (Gag). What this story needs is ORIGINALITY. You need to bring ...

I agree that the middle was a bit to repetetive. You also used and way to much. The "broken head and jaw..." part sounded kind've silly and gross, and kind've ...

I agree with the above authors. The name "Sevy" is wierd and if Lily's going to call him something, i think it should just be "Sev". Also "For the love ...

First of all, it is an okay poem, but I think you messed up the 5-7-5 syllable scheme in the second line of the second stanza. "Ex-cept for sum-mer camp" ...

I give you a 7.5. I also agree about the last stanza. Altogether, the poem was a bit boring as well.

"Long ago, there lived a great sorceror called Inarus the Vassar. Through the many long years of his life, he compiled titanic amounts of knowledge in the magical arts. Unfortunately, ...

So spoke the Demon, mindful of hardships and of cruel slaughters: Each dawn I rise alone, mind in ancient woes, wretched and deprived of my native land, my mind bound ...

The heratic introduced himself as Lampellogon, the king’s best advisor and good friend. He led them through the giant bronze palace doors and up a long hallway to a large ...

Chapter 6: The Journey Begins When they finally set out on their journey, the day was late. Kamos had explained that the Unknown Gate had not opened in a thousand ...

Training like this went on for months. A the end of the fifth month, Jonny could ding potions (and hit the targets), deadly acid paste, hatch knùbs (pixies), levitate objects, ...

As soon as the winged creatures were defeated, the evil creatures ran to Kamos’s house and set it aflame. They let out a shrill shriek and a few of the ...

The next morning it was snowing! Jonny couldn’t believe his eyes when he looked out the window. He had spent the night in Kamos’s house at an invitation from him. ...

There was nothing but rubble left of the house. He wondered how it caught fire. Then he remembered the shirt catching fire and wondered if the man had done it. ...